lodaas wrote on 25 Feb 2021 22:52:
maybe finish each chapter in a way that portrays everything thats wrong with moes messed up brain and actions, and how it impact his wifes feelings. I think it would remove every trigger especially with grants writing skills.
And he would not keep us in suspense that much
1) If you could what he writes above, that would definitely be a big help.
2) Also, I think we should move this story to the balabatim's forum. Since that is a place by definition has more triggering things.
3) Perhaps we should place an announcement at the beginning along the lines of what Grant wrote before (here's a rough draft taken from Grant's post, he can shorten it and fix it up if he wants).
DISCLAIMER: This story can be triggering at times, but the author deems it necessary to be blunt about the temptations - just as we experience them on a daily basis, in order to illustrate how if not reigned in, they can lead to places many times worse and to pain many times greater. The story's purpose is to take the reader through the intense desires, pain, dissatisfaction and disappointments that the main characters go through - until hitting rock bottom, in the hope that it will suffice as a tangible portrayal and prediction of one who doesn't gain control. Reading the twisted justifications and wrongful self righteousness, and where they can lead, will hopefully remove the need for one to heaven forbid experience these unfortunate circumstances himself, to gain the clarity reached only through personal experience and realization. To achieve this effect, there can be triggering situations depicted at times. Reader discretion advised.
In any event, if we can do these few things, I agree that you should put back the last chapter and continue as planned...
Thanks for the great story, it's really powerful!